Thursday 7 August 2008

Prologue

The clouds seemed to light up a brilliant white as he broke through them, almost blinding white. He lived for this moment, knowing they spread out, pure white in every direction, like an endless expanse of paradise.

The Last Resort, he liked to think of it. The very last place on earth that was untouched by humanity, its pollution, the noise, the pain, the politics and the rage. He'd have to go back down to it sometime, but for now, it was just him and trusty old Jane. How she shined in the evening sun, reflecting off hard rays on her white and blue trim. The steady hum of her propeller already a part of the serenity.

Matt never thought of his Mooney as just an airplane. It was always Her, and She was always Jane. She was not unlike his mistress, granting him an escape from reality in a way nothing else ever had. At 24, he figured that was a worrying situation, but the beauty of the world above drove everything out of his mind pretty damn quick.

The clouds cleared for a few miles and he banked slightly, holding course with rudders, so he could look down... God's view of Conroe, rolling green plains. He spied a brook stretching across the green, deep blue water glimmering in the bright sun. Following it with his eyes, he spied a castle, still mostly intact with high rising turrets casting shadows west across it's fortification and the overgrown grass beyond.

He let out a low whistle. "Funny, never noticed that before," he said, mostly to himself. He quickly set aside his flight chart and reached over to find his map. He was surprised to discover no record of the location ever having held a fort or castle of any kind, not for a few hundred miles. "That can't be right," he said, rechecking. He felt an urge to set down and have a look around.

"Nothing ventured, nothing gained," he sighed, as he started banking towards the castle, looking for a safe place to set down. He found a level bit of grass for a stretch and marked off his touchdown spot. A few minutes later he was on the ground, approaching the castle.

Up close the stone walls seemed to reach up to the sky, imposing their presence against nature and man alike. There was no moat to this castle, so there was no drawbridge. Just an outer fortification leading straight on to the actual castle. Matt crossed the outer courtyard quickly, not interested in it, while any other day he would've spent hours looking around. Today he didn't, because today he saw a book lying by the inner wall. Never mind that he was in an apparently non-existent large defensive stone structure, but a book?

He quickly flipped it over and opened it, the pages turning easily as though it were brand new, but yellowing with age. Not brittle at all. He flipped past a blank page and got to the first. From the neat writing, he judged it was a journal or a diary.

There was one sentence on the page.

"Nothing ventured, nothing gained."

12 comments:

Arielle Fragassi said...

I'ma make you finish, darn it!

Anonymous said...

impressive....i like i like......!

tina said...

i thought you weren't for flattery :P

the descriptions are ok, i guess... i expect you to keep improving until, after so many chapters (yes, i dare you to write more and more chapters :D), you'll make us feel as if we're right there with the characters. you're off to a good start :)

Joie Mayfield said...

Fantastic! Keep going!

Jessica Shope said...

I'm liking it. :]

I'm an author, too. Check out my main site and story sometime if you're in the neighborhood.

http://janeopal.blogspot.com/

- Jane

Kestrel said...

A very intriguing start! I like the way this is going... Time travel, alternate universe?? Keep going!
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Anonymous said...

OoOoOoO...mysterious! lol I love the way it starts. You know, some writers struggle to find that "hook" to keep their readers reading, but YOU GOT IT!

maliha's musings said...

"At 24, he figured that was a worrying situation", love that line really, its so idiosyncratic you when lines like that come out with reference to planes! i really like the style in which you started, the lede and all that,but something kinda went a wee bit flat in the middle if u know what i mean, right after your first'nothing ventured,nothign gained', it just phases the reader a little bit, i cnat really put my finger on it, maybe i wasn't paying enuf attention, maybe ur scene and time shifts should be better secured! but really commendable start brat,more more( lol in the most non sexual way possible)
much louve!

Arielle Fragassi said...

UPDATE ALREADY! :D

Anonymous said...

:) I quite enjoyed it. It sort of builds up this vision, of a 24 year old, his passion, the skies. I was a little lost with a few words here and there, but thats my poor vocabulary. However, a brilliant prologue. Althout you haven't gone much ahead - I urge you to. For the sake of finishing what you started.

Hold on to this dream, I can see it going places hun.

Miladysa said...

An excellent start!

The Strongest Memories said...

you commented my photography. :) thanks heaps it gives me reason to keep doing it. i didnt know where else to talk to you so i just commented this. your a good writer keep it up.